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LoveAndFaith (Chapter 32) - Sun 21 Mar 2021

All five chapters were good. 


Carlyn (Chapter 27) - Thu 18 Mar 2021

Such a cute story! Sorry, I know I get a little zealous with regard to grammatical and writing technique, but I do it out of a love of writing and the desire to see those with talent flourish. I think you have the makings to capture an audience.  This story is amazing and has such possibilities! I look forward to seeing where you go with this story, and hope you'll consider my constructive criticism as just that. You are imaginative and that alone is amazing! Looking forward to your next chapter!


Carlyn (Chapter 27) - Thu 18 Mar 2021

"I’m not into food that the well off people eat." Oh honey...#SmacksForehead


Carlyn (Chapter 25) - Thu 18 Mar 2021

Awwwweee...


Carlyn (Chapter 24) - Thu 18 Mar 2021

Whaaaaat? I don't get what they're trying to tell Sesshomaru. Is HE the Valkyrie? If he is, is Kagome NOT? 


Carlyn (Chapter 22) - Thu 18 Mar 2021

Waaaaait a second. Since WHEN are he and demon kind the only ones who can see her? I feel like that should've been explained? So lost. 


Carlyn (Chapter 20) - Thu 18 Mar 2021

Hop, skip, and a jump but SUPER sweet nonetheless!


Carlyn (Chapter 17) - Wed 17 Mar 2021

This is truly sad and sweet. A perfect combination. Well done. 


Carlyn (Chapter 10) - Wed 17 Mar 2021

Wait, wait wait wait wait... "Sesshomaru running his clawed fingers gently through her raven black locks." I thought he hair was white? 


Carlyn (Chapter 10) - Wed 17 Mar 2021

Wait, wait wait wait wait... "Sesshomaru running his clawed fingers gently through her raven black locks." I thought he hair was white? 


Carlyn (Chapter 7) - Wed 17 Mar 2021

Nice cliffhanger!


Carlyn (Chapter 5) - Wed 17 Mar 2021

"Take her out on the town.” I love Rin! She's so cute and innocent. Great chapter!


Carlyn (Chapter 4) - Wed 17 Mar 2021

Ok so, not sure how Sesshomaru could type in her current description and come up with the previous description of her former self. That part didn't make sense to me considering how different both descriptions are. THAT SAID, OMG OMG OMG I really do LOVE where you're headed with how she came to be a she is currently (trying not to give away any spoilers for any who haven't read it yet) but i NEVER saw that coming and I'm even more excited to keep reading! Great job!


Carlyn (Chapter 3) - Wed 17 Mar 2021

Progressing a little fast, with the characters so quickly acquiescing to their roles. I was a little confused how a being with no memory of her name or her kind would adapt to her level of perceived comfort in such a short period of time without questioning a little further. But I like the story and so far it seems to have great potential! I also love the hair color reversal which took me by surprise. So glad it wasn't something cheezy like black and white stripes. Lol. I also love the setup of Rin being demon and her divorced parents not being there for her often. Though I would have preferred to stretch out the interactions with "Valerie" a little longer before Sesshomaru realized the error of his parental ways? I'm super excited to see where this story goes! All in all I think you've done a wonderful job so far and I'm looking forward to reading more!!!


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 27) - Tue 16 Mar 2021

Nice chapter. 


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 26) - Tue 16 Mar 2021

Great chapter. 


Toni (Chapter 25) - Sat 25 Mar 2017

hi - i just finished this great story and i hope find it within yourself to continue it - you are a very talented writer - 


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 25) - Wed 27 Apr 2016

Good chapters, keep it coming.


Mona (Chapter 24) - Sun 17 Apr 2016

That was a mean cliffhanger.  Hopefully you can update soon, it was great to finally read an update.


cherise (Chapter 23) - Tue 01 Dec 2015

Whoa. That was fast. I like where this is going, keep up the good work! 


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