Okay, finally decided to leave a review. And, I hope you take this as constructive criticism, as it is meant to be. I really enjoy reading your stories, you have some really good plotlines. However, some of the grammar could use a little work. For instance, whenever you use the word "seen", as in "Sesshoumaru froze when he "seen" a black silhouette of a inu-demon." The word should be "saw". The word "seen" should be preceded by a verb, such as have, had or has. "He "had seen" the girl numerous times" or "He has seen the girl.." or "I have seen them together" or even "He was seen by the both of them.." Just about all of the instances that you used "seen", it should have been "saw". "Sesshomaru froze when he saw a black silhouette of an inu-demon". Hope this helps. Anyway, keep working at it, okay? Like I said, your stories are really good, they do keep my attention. :D
This is one hell of a story! It just keeps getting better and better. Update soon.
Keep it coming
Oh no! Just when things were looking up too!
'His daughter Mika?' Inuyasha annoys me lol...
As I said before, just when you think things are going to happen one way, here comes one BIG twist. I love stories that do that. Naraku's puppet was a rather ... unpleasant surprise. Many thanks for the quick update and as usual, anxiously waiting for the next one! ^.^
Keep up the good work and update soon!
Not who I was expecting. One thing I love about authors...just when you think you might know what's going on they twist the plot on you. Love the story and am looking for an update soon. Thank you!
Thanks for the fast update :)
Now that Sesshomaru knows I can't wait to see what's going to happen!
Uh oh. Now that Sesshomaru knows I bet all hell's gonna break loose! I can't wait to see what happens!
update soon!
Inuyasha possesive much? and Kagome what the heck?!!!Sesshomaru needs to show up asap! 0_0
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