Absolutely fantastic story so far. I can hardly wait for the next chapter. Thank goodness I finally made a Dokuga account so that I can review stories like this one. ^^

I love your story.  It is really sad and complex, yet well executed. I also like the fact that you are not romanticizing or over dramatizing anything, which makes for a great balance. I look forward to the next chapter.

wait a minute he suppose to win her??? uhm, really! oh, how twisted

I'm new to the site as a member, but not new as a reader...And I've got to say, your story is one of the most interesting I've read here.  I always HATE the stories where Kagome winds up pregnant...But in your story, I LOVED it, for some reason.  XD  It was a great turn to the story!

Anyways, I just want you to know that you are doing a great job, so please continue to add to the story...AND SOON, please!  :D

i dont think its bad and cant wait for your next update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 

pleaaazee continueee!! ^^

"I'm just helping." Kagome said. "Better then just being a prisoner."

Sesshomaru tightened his hold on her arm and she winced. Sesshomaru loosened his hold when he saw Wai watching.

Fallowing Kwat to his boat his hold still on Kagome.

"Sesshomaru don't worry about business I will take care of it." Kwat said smiling. "Kagome I am going to town would you like to go?"

"Yes!" Kagome said happily.

Shouldn't it be

"sesshomaru don't worry about business I will take care of it." Kwat said smiling. "KIKYO I am going to town would you like to go?"

Not Kagome.

It's an awesome story, btw ^^

I just read all the chappies and so far I am amazed that you were able to portray Sesshou so well. I loved the raw emotions and it had me in tears during the parts where Kagome was feeling broken and hopeless. I wondering what Kagome is going to do now? Will she tell Seshou or will Kikyo do it for her? Will Kagome tell everyone what actually happened to her during the 3 months she was missing? Keep up the good work and update soon :P

man shes pregnant!!! she should tell him i'd love to see what happens!!!!! haha anyway be waiting for more!!!!!!!!

OMG...what a twist! What will she do next? Kaede already said if she was pregnant then she couldnt live there. She needs to tell Sessho for her own safety unless she knows someone else to go to.

Continual please

It's really good! I like the creativity.

wow! just came by this one and let me tell you Its great and everything else man... hope you update asap!!!

aaww, poor sesshomaru. then again he deserves it, wat he did was pretty bad. i hope kagome will find it in her 2 forgive him even though it might take a while. oh & i have a question: is kagome pregnant? i know there r no signs of her being pregant but this question was just bothering me. peace:)

Pretty good (one complaint:  you put a lot of 'are's instead of 'or's and 'want's instead of 'won't's), though I still expect a few more chapters of ass-kissing and groveling from Sesshoumaru.

Finally he found out! I can't wait for the update!!

This is an interesting storyline and to be upfront and honest I give every story a chance by reading it. I hope that this doesn't come across as rude or mean because it's not my intention at all. But I want to be honest and tell you that I find that I'm struggling to get through these chapters becuase there is no smooth flow from one scene to the next, there's a lot of jumping around and I find it very difficult to get through.... I'll admit that I am no English professor so I'm not going to be critical about spelling/grammar and what your sentence should or shouldn't start with.  However I think as a reader it's important to be able to go through a chapter that's written in a way that will not make them confused or feeling like they have whiplash.  I think this is what you need to work on to improve this story because it definately has potential however the delivery of it, I'm sorry to say, is the reason why I'm struggling. Good luck!  

ticktickticktickticktickBO000OOOoMMMMmmm!!!  HA, shit's hit the fan now!  I expect at least TEN chapters full of him kissing Kagome's ass and suffering mental anguish!

oooooo.... Sesshomaru has a lot to atone for.... please keep the good work!

i absolutely love your story, the only thing that would make it a little easier to read though would be some kind of indication of a scene change, it gets a little confusing when your talking with two characters and then two other characters magically start talking...