I know you've probably been told this many times, but I just had to express how much I've enjoyed Unspoiled. Something that you declared in the first few chapters was merely a vehicle to explore drabbles and short oneshots evolved into so much more. I've read and enjoyed many of your other stories, as well as works of other authors on FanFiction and Dokuga. I've got to tell you that Unspoiled is my favorite InuYasha fanfiction of any pairing to date.
I really enjoyed your portrayal of Kagome and Sesshoumaru. I found the evolution of their relationship very believable. I especially appreciate that Kagome didn't jump right into a romantic relationship with an adult Sesshoumaru after having grown to love the boy. I thought you did an excellent job incorporating instinct and pack dynamics with feelings and choice.
I agree with the many people who cited Hisoka-sensei as their favorite original character. He was well develooped and felt like he belonged in the setting. I love Shippo as a kid and a young adult, especially his relationship with Hosoka and Sesshoumaru. The scene at the end in the bath house was one of my favorites. The contrast between Shippo and Sesshomaru as children was very well done. I also appreciate your characterization of Inu Taisho and his mate. Although I enjoy the more playful or mischievous characterizations of the two in other works, I wouldn't have been appropriate for this story in the least. They were very believable and satisfying. Finally, I didn't miss Kikyo in the least. Thanks for not beating that particular dead horse into the ground.
You have a compelling voice and style of writing. You also manage to keep your details straight most of the time despite the length and intricacy of your plot line. Your editing is also well done. My compliments to you on your work and vision. I hope that you continue to develop your craft and look forward to reading more of your stories.
I must say, this is an AMAZING story. Your writing style is beautiful and flows smoothly. The only things that left me wanting was Koga's fate and Sango+Miroku's story. Perhaps you addressed it and I glossed over it in my hurry to get to the end, but I wished for there to be some kind of closure, since Kagome left without saying goodbye to her best friend.
//cries//
ritsuki: TT^TT one of the best stories of milord and milady
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