This is cute. I like it. Good luck with future stories.
OMIGOD! I am SO glad I read this little gem! It was hilarious! My only concrit would be that you might want to separate the dialog. Traditionally speaking, when a character speaks, you give them their own paragraph.
Character A says, "I like socks."
"So do I," replied character B
And so on. Other than that little nitpick, this story is fantastic!
LC Rose (Chapter 1) - Wed 13 May 2009
| LMAO! That was awesome!!! I'm so glad possessed recommended I give it a read. Please say you'll continue to add your wonderful voice to the fandom!!
| ha ha! that was great.
| Excuse me while I go rub myself with peanut butter. If it attracts guys like Lord Sesshomaru, it would be worth it!
Nobody (Chapter 1) - Mon 11 May 2009
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! That was the best ever! I am giving you pretend karma for that one cause i am still laughing. poor Sesshoumaru! Poor Kagome! HE WAS LICKING HER! OMG!! HAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Ok im done. WOnderful job! Absolutely wonderful!
Possessed (Chapter 1) - Mon 11 May 2009
LMAO!!! A first attempt?!? You NEED to keep writing! This was EXCELLENT! It was constructed very well, with the characterizations, descriptions, spelling and grammar very good. You have a wonderful imagination and a nice ability to surprise the reader.
It cracks me up she's WEARING a peanut butter tanner!... LOL, LOL, LOL!
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