That was soooo cute. Kawaii! I loved it and the progression. I look forward to continue this wonderful adventure.
This story sounds interesting, keep it coming. 
      
This story sounds interesting, keep it coming 
      
rose (Chapter 1) -  Fri 06 Mar 2015 
next chapter please 
      
I don't mean to sound harsh but you need spacing. Your story looks like a really really long paragraph. I know the space is different than when you post/ copy&paste your story. I kept getting lost while reading. It's a good story so far. Just hard to read.  
      
That's a lot jumbled up. Paragraphs and page breaks....would a wonderful add on 
      
   
   
 
 
 
										 
									
									
																										
								
								
								
																								
															
													
					
				
								
				
				
			
				
				
		
				
	
			
			
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