Ah a happy end. Thank you. I would have liked it to end with maybe a perspective of Shippou, reflecting on what he had done and how he felt about how it had resolved, but I appreciate that it ended happy.
I think you mean "pond" and not "pound"?
Awe it ended so cutely. Keep up the good work.
Sesshomaru is right, that is a sweet closing scene. I really enjpayed reading your story.
A purely technical constructive criticism: beware homonyms and run-on sentences. There were quite a few chapters with mixed up words (board instead of bored, where instead of were, etc.). The teacher in me was also adding in lots and lots of periods to break up run-ons.
I'll definirely be popping over to your profile at a later date to do some more reading :)
I like! Hurrah for Kagome and Sesshomaru talking it out instead of jumping right into intimacy! :)
Very nice.
I like that you have Kagome grieving for Shippo throughout the story; just like real life, it is a process and a journey, not an isolated event. Those we miss come to mind through a lot of our everyday events, and it is good to remember :)
eyebrows raised higher
Oh. Yeah, he definitely should have asked her...
If I was Kagome, I would definitely make him wait longer than a month, just to be contrary about it ;)
eyebrows raised
Ooooooo, what did Sesshomaru do...?!?
clicks to next chapter...
Ah ha! I was just wondering where Rin was hiding. Question answered :)
A very nice set of explantations in this chapter. I like how you wrote Kagome's reaction to being thrown in the pond: indignant at first, and then she sucks it up like a mature adult.
My only issue: didn't Kagome do meditation with Megumi? I thought she was meditating when Midoriko appeared to her and then they meditated together during breaks on their journey to Lady Sakura's palace...
That's definitely a unique way of transforming Kagome into a youkai! I love that you explained how it came about that she kept her reiki as well :)
This story was amazing and I enjoyed it!.How God Created MotherGod took the fragrance of a flower,The majesty of a tree,The gentleness of a morning a dewThe calm of a quiet sea,The beauty of a twilight hourThe soul of a starry nightThe laughter of the rippling brook,The grace of a bird in flight,Then God fashioned from these thingsA creation like no other,And when His masterpiece was through,He called it simply...MOTHER.Happy Mother's Day!
awesome!
next chapter please
Is this a re-write??? What was wrong with the first one??? Or am I in the 'Twilight Zone' ???
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