I love dark drama they are my all time faves, and this piece is full of all the right stuff that makes it great. Your characterisation of the cast is wonderfully done and your overall writing styles superb. [Wish I could write like that, sighs] It will be a long wait until December for chapter 1V, but I know it will be worth the wait. Till then I burn!
I really liked this chapter, and I like your characterization of Inuyasha. He's not some over the top characiture of who he was in canon, even from the short time he appeared I could see that he had depth. You portrayed him as he was in canon, with layers and human emotions. After reading a couple fics this week that made him out to be the exact opposite, this actually brought a smile (though haunted from the feeling of the chapter) to my face.
Second off, I love you writing. I envy you sort of. You're so good!
Thirdly, though it's a shame this is on haitus 'til December, that's perfectly reasonable. I know I've done that with all my fics so I get the thought behind it. Once more, have fun with NaNo.
Lastly, as for the Kagura portion. I'd like it explored a little, like maybe some feelings that bloom but overall fade, maybe because they cared for her and she starts to think that she should love them in return, like she feels guilty and wants to make up that caring for her with her own love, though in the end after they helped her with her trauma, she realizes that that's not what she wants. She wants her own freedom and to be with a love (or multiple) because she loves them, not out of guilt. I personally would prefer that it ends up more SessKag in the end rather than SessKagKagu but your the author so whatever you want, or others want, is fine by me.
Thanks for writing!
Oh, man. I REALLY feel bad for Kagura. I don't think she should be involved in the Sess/Kag pairing. She's too scarred, both physically and mentally, to even think of letting a male touch her. I hope Kagome gets her claws on that priestess that corrupted her. Looking forward to the next chapter.
kagura x inuyasha? XD
and i think everyone in dokuga knows what a bond do to dogs and girls heh heh heh. Man i stick here too much
Shaneka (Chapter 2) - Mon 28 Oct 2013
Great chapter dying for the next update.
Keep it coming
I read the first chapter and was sincerely hoping that wasn't the end. I'm glad it wasn't!! I would love to see this continued!!!
Ashes (Chapter 2) - Sun 27 Oct 2013
I don't like it, but it's really good. Your writing style is solid and well done; no missing words, typo's, gaps in description, or phrasing that makes me want to slam my head into the desk. I also think you have a good handle on the base of Kagome and Sesshoumaru's personalities. Above all your plot is interesting so far and I can easily see everything with my mind's eye as I'm reading... which is probably why the first chapter made me so uncomfortable (I did a lot of skimming).
Good work. I'll definitely be coming back.
Nik (Chapter 2) - Sun 27 Oct 2013
This story was intense, loved it!
Looking forward to the next update.
Darrakk (Chapter 2) - Sun 27 Oct 2013
Interesting idea, with several possibilities. Can't wait to find out what exactly is going on!
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