Great story, keep it coming.
Hi
Interesting story and plot, but please, go back and read trouhg again, or give it to a beta, because the errors are lot, and disturbing the flow ot the story.
Just one thing, if a girl goes through maturing, like you implied in the first chapter, at the age of six, the she needs a doctor fast, not a nanny. Sorry, the biologist raised her head in me :D MAybe you should word it a little bit otherwise.
kathryn (Chapter 1) - Mon 19 Nov 2012
ive enjoyed the 4 chapters you have posted so far and am looking forward to the rest of the story
Midian (Chapter 4) - Sun 18 Nov 2012
great start keep it up
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