I've just dived into this story and have read it straight through. I like the AU spin with an original flavor to it. Your use of canon characters in new ways was masterfully done. I appreciate that you saved Kagura. She is such a sympathetic character, one forced into heinous acts against her will.
The only thing I don't like is Kagome always playing the victim in taking responsibility for messing up when most of it is actually not her fault. She was kept ignorant every step of the way by Totosai. Then only Ryura acknowledged that she actually tried to do something when the other two present who had much more experience did nothing. InuKimI is still running on the assumption that Kagome is a trained miko.
While fixing problems others caused is admirable, allowing yourself to take the blame for others is not character building. She seems to see herself as a screw up correcting her own mistakes rather than as a heroine pulling others out of the fire. It's frustrating that this is a consistent theme throughout that no one but Ryura acknowledges. These characters don't talk to each other when it comes to her. Is this because, like Harry Potter, she's being set up as a willing sacrificial lamb or is it because no other character has the spine to take responsibility for their own actions or inaction?
Overall I've really enjoyed your story. I look forward to seeing the wrap up. I want to know Ryura can be happy and I'm curious to see your take on the selfless/pure wish.
Ankita (Chapter 53) - Mon 27 Jul 2015
Awesome chapter happy that sessho isss beackkkk yayayayyaya next chapter please please please
Loveyaa (Chapter 53) - Sun 26 Jul 2015
Yay for the group effort, even though it only took Kagome. Poor Inuyasha though. I hope she didn't get him too bad. I think the chapter turned out just fine. Makes you wonder what will happen next with everybody and everything. I can't wait to see :)
Andrea (Chapter 53) - Sun 26 Jul 2015
Great chapter! You should be proud of it, it was wonderful.
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