interesting.
I like this but i think there are a few things that could make it easier for your readers as well as gather more in the first place.
Rather then constantly saying PV for promotional Video, why not just say Video. it's not a long word to type only 3 more letters, but it wouldn't leave someone who missed you AN's about PV meaning Promotional video, meaning such.
Another thing, your summery seems to have too much in it, and is slightly confusing, it made me, at first want to skip this, but i like to try new fics so i read it, i like the idea, but the summery needs to be a bit shorter and to the point for it to graps readers. if you want you can use this, or use it as a base:
He was leading a double life when he found her and pulled her in as well. She wanted little to do with him, the complications of her own life more stressful with him in it. She walked away from him, and the burdens he brought her never knowing just who he was, and what she would leave behind. Later in life they meet again, both feeling as though they know the other, but complications of the past kept their identities away from one another. Now with scheming grandchild wanting relatives, jobs with jerk-face bosses, who will she like more, the man from her past, or the man he became? *Lots of twist and unexpected turns WARNING: rated M for, language and some mild erotica. Rating may go MA later on.
I like the idea! And I love everytime Kagome > Kagura
Erika (Chapter 1) - Tue 22 Feb 2011
This is a great story so far! Please keep updating!
Keep on Keepin' on,
Erika
O.M.G.
I love fics like these! I think alternate universe is my favorite! I like your portrayal of Kagome. She's fiesty but she still has a fragile soul (sometimes). I can tell that this is going to be awesome! I totally think that Visual Kei would be rocked by the guys of inuyasha. So I have several guesses as to the identities of the guys... but so far its just the three of them? urr cliffhanger!! please update. It was great to read!
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