Well written story, good flow, keep up the good work, and more updates please!

It's getting more and more interesting.  I can't wait to read the next chapter :)

Very interesting can't wait for the rest to follow.  I love suspense stories and you did an awesome job, grabbing the reader right from the start.

I think it is off to an interesting start! Keep up the good work and I am excited to read more :D

The first chapter looks very promising and suspenseful.  I hope you plan to continue this story.  :)