One of the first things I noticed is that there is no clear disclaimer saying that you don't own Inuyasha or the song you used in this fic. The center alignment also makes it hard to read.

While this is a wonderful first chapter other than that, it is very difficult to imagine how she will end up with Sesshoumaru. I would suggest either putting that it will eventually be Sess/Kag in the summary or in an AN in the beginning to coverer all the basis and keep youself covered.

I really enjoyed the read and will be looking foreward to more of your work in the future.

I really liked your writing style in this piece, it flowed really well. However, I think this needs a warning or something that this will be Sess/Kag in the future, as Dokuga is dedicated to the relationship between the two, and many on Dokuga dislike Inu/Kag, as well as it not being permitted on the site. I honestly can't see how this will become Sess/Kag, though, as even if Kagome is revived, she asked Inuyasha to wait for her, and Sesshoumaru isn't in the picture at all! Still, though, I would like to find out what happens next, and  I also want to know what happens to everyone.

Slight edit on my review, I just realized I was looking at the wrong info and it was in fact marked incomplete, however, I would really put a warning that it will be Kag/Sess since the summary really isn't enough to make sure.

And interesting peice, though I think the alignment just made the story harder to read instead of adding to it.  There were a few mistakes such as white instead of while and I would really recommend not using all caps, they do not help and in fact just interupt readers.  Try italics or the words in 's.

Now for the big problem, this story was Kagome/Inuyasha and considering it is complete, there is no future Kagome/Sesshoumaru possibility.  Which is a problem considering this site only allows Kag/Sess pairing, whether it's a romantic, friend or what not, but he wasn't even mentioned.

Oh, wow what a sad ending.  I hope you decide to do more.  This story was very well done.  The details and flow were wonderful.  I could see her there crawling and crying.  I also think you caught the mood just right without overdoing it.

such a sad begining! I assume that to continue the story kagome will be reincarnated or something... it will be interesting to find out if the others are too. I wonder if she'll eventually remember this twisted and cruel end for her... maybe its something Sesshomaru will try and help her rmemeber which will create some angst because if Inuyasha is back to it would only stand to reason that after 2 lifetimes of loving him she would in the 3rd as well. curious to see where you'll take this.