Hitomi and Raven are such nice characters. Usually I'm kind of repelled by original characters, but I like these two. Sesshy's being such a YOUNG guy, a very nice job portraying him in character with at least the early Manga... If he and Hitomi really do mate, she will have to be like a mother to him...
Wait, wait. To steal the Tensaiga? Up until all the crapola at the end of the manga, that was SESSY's sword. Am I missin something?
My mental picture of Hitomi is kind of like a sleastack from the old tv show "Land of the Lost". I'm trying to get rid of that imagery, however, and superimpose something a little prettier...
You have my imagination going, keep up the great work!
The first time I read about Hitome, I was freaked out. Like when I saw Sesshomaru flying with a female dog demon. I was like, NO NO NO! But I'm all right now...
Why in the hell would she forgive him? Huh? And Sango should have killed that arrogant b****! Ooops, sorry. Got carried away there by your vivid writing!
Too little, too late, InuYasha! Still, I'm glad he said what he did at the very end. And that he finally saw through Kikyo. Loved your viscious Kikyo. Much more true to the way I perceive her in the anime and manga than most people, I'm stunned and puzzled that she is not reviled by all. Go figure.
This is a treat to read. I really like your writing style. Excellent grammar, punctuation, all the technical aspects are good. I love your characterizations- you are really good at drawing a mental picture in the reader's mind. I feel the bite of Kikyo's spite and arrogance, Sesshomaru's grace, care for Rin, and careful maintenance of his noble status when interacting with others, InuYasha's coarseness, and Kagome's wistfulness and resolve. Love it!
I've been reading this story of ff.net. I'm so glad you brought it to Dokuga!
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