Sailor Moon new anime has already aired two episodes, If you missed them you can watch them on youtube and episode 3 of Sailor Moon Crystal airs tomorrow. Interesting, keep it coming
This is so sad...
It makes me depressed and I sort of want to cry.
Hairann (Chapter 1) - Fri 03 Dec 2010
Interesting start to this story and would love to see where you take it. Though I would reccomend adding a bit more detail to the story to help the chapter blossom a bit.
Ikaru (Chapter 1) - Fri 03 Dec 2010
This is a very good start, you have an interesting way of telling the story. However, I would recommend that you go back through and check your grammar, there were a few spots in the story that felt very choppy because of it, but they are all easy fixes. As i said you have a great start here ad with a little tweaking it will be an excellent and unique story. Keep up the good work!
Very, very good start to this story...I really want to read more. I have to say that from the first paragraph on you caught my attention and kept it to the very end, though some would be upset about the cliffy I think that you ended the chapter at the right point to leave your reader's wanting more. ^-^ Keep up the good work!
What a heart wrenching first chapter! It definitely grabs your attention from the start, and makes me curious about how it will progress. I'd go through and do a double check on your spelling and grammar. There were a few easy fixes that you could make that would really help make the story flow more smoothly. I think you have very eloquent thoughts to convey, but they sometimes get lost in the gramatical errors.
Wow, what a great start. Oh the cliffy,*sighs and pretends to faint* You have definitely set this up to be a great story. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Well done.I
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