Great story, nice plot. I can't wait to see what their trip throught modern japan will be like. Update soon.
I don't know about toning down the way you write, I enjoy reading stories written without reserve! I like the almost Shakespearean feel of your writing style, though there is nothing wrong with chapter 3, I miss the raw emotion that came through in chapter 1. Wish I could borrow a little of that vigor and emotion for my writing!
Chapter one was very powerful and packed with emotion. Can't wait to find out what chapter two brings...
mary (Chapter 3) - Fri 12 Mar 2010
i'd say that was toned down. great chapter. 2009? why that particular year? hhhmmm... til the next update then.
awesome, love the way the story goes so far. it's going to take forever for sunday to get here, but i can wait. i understand that it takes time to write a good chapter. good luck with the story, hope everyone likes it. =]
mary (Chapter 2) - Mon 08 Mar 2010
impressive! bravo! i keep imagining them two hundred or so years into the future(inuyasha and the gang's time as a reference point).
where are they? WHEN are they? it's so exciting to read! the characters are clear cut, the plot wonderfully crafted, the tone hopeful and a style all on your own. well done! please update soon! can't wait to hear more from you.
i love the story so far. keep updating
CMorrighan (Chapter 2) - Mon 08 Mar 2010
I'm intrigued. I love the characteristics that you've attributed to each of the characters while still keeping them In Character. Redundant, but appreciated. I look forward to your next update!
Thank you for sharing,
Celeste
You have been Wicked approved! Now This Wicked will ask nicely for more. PLEASE!!! oh PRETTY PLEASE! Maybe that was begging, but I'll beg for more. Can't wait for your next update!!!
This is a really well thought out fic, and I can tell that you'll go far if you keep writing as well as you do now. The only thing I can see as being a hinderance is the elegance of your wording ... I got a little confused a couple of times and had to go back to read again. If possible, you should tone the wording down just a little so that your ideas flow clearly and your readers don't get too confused. Other than that, you've done a wonderful job, and I look forward to reading more! Keep up the wonderful work! ~Aubrey
Good and intriguing start to this fanfiction. I liked Kagome kissing Sesshoumaru by mistake in her misery. You did a great job conveying her misery and depression at Inuyasha leaving her. I look forward to seeing where you go with this fanfic.
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