Ummm...can you say ouch? that was a very mean review. Ugh, i despise those kinds of reviews. However, this story has potential. it truly does. but, you need to slow it down. make it a little more realistic. edit it, make it longer, make it emotional (by which i mean that you need to cover thoroughly the emotions the characters are feeling). Good luck, darling.
Sam (Chapter 1) - Mon 31 Aug 2009
I'm sorry but this is just really unrealistic. Her actions with Sesshoumaru are completely unbelievable. You don't just have a heartbreaking break up and then run into that person years later and just be like "Sango and Anyme say Hi" are you kidding me? Very badly written maybe fanfiction is not for you just being truthful. Sorry if it hurts your feelings.
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