Reviews for marrige and baby by dakota

violet_sesshoumaru (Chapter 1) - Fri 15 May 2009
heyy everyone its me,dakota (the author.) and something happened on my other account so i will be doing all of my writing on this account. xoxo-dakota

Kia (Chapter 3) - Fri 17 Apr 2009
This plot is good. But your grammer and usage is horrible, work on writing and keeping the characters some what like the series.

Nobody (Chapter 1) - Wed 15 Apr 2009

Ok, your dialouge is a little confusing, and i'm not sure whats going on and who is involved. Also there is a rule on this site about word count per chapter. You need to add more content to your chapters and going into a little more detail as to what is going on mught be a good idea.


katie (Chapter 4) - Tue 14 Apr 2009
wow that was fast i just got done with 3 and find out 4 is up u are fast and i like it please keep going

katie (Chapter 3) - Tue 14 Apr 2009
wow i like it please keep going

kitty (Chapter 3) - Tue 14 Apr 2009
you need to work more on your chapters... there is no detail and at the end of it I am going HUH... its to short... I like the story idea but not the execution

katie (Chapter 1) - Mon 13 Apr 2009
wow that is cool please keep going

InuYoukaiLiz (Chapter 1) - Mon 13 Apr 2009
You're on the right track but it's missing something. You need details...usually what makes a good story is details (more too much is overwhelming) you also need a well thought out plot and believable characters...if you need inspiration check out my stories. Though if you find grammatical errors I'm sorry. I'm usually too eager to pst my stories that I almost never spell check them O.o you're not alone in the typo department XD

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