This is an interesting start, but it seems very rushed. How did the others die? How did the well close? Why did Kags get the bum's rush out of the village? There are way too many unanswered questions. Try to slow the pace down. There isn't any hurry. You should also get a beta. There are some spelling and grammatical errors that I noticed that a good beta could help with. Nothing big, just some little stuff. Other than that, I think you could have something good here, just slow down!

I see that you are going for the angsty/drama here and killing off so many of the main characters is always a daunting task. There were a couple of spelling errors and some missing punctuation which caused some sentences to run on a bit but your plot has great potential. I would switch chapter 2 where Kagome is introduced to be chapter 1 since this is a Sess/Kag story and she is your heroine. Loran/Lorin - you spelt two different ways btw the prologue and ch 3...is a secondary character so his story acts as a backdrop to the main tale. You might want to rework a little description of who Lorin is, what he looks like, what role he actually plays in the Western Lands and his relationship to Sesshoumaru. Good work so far.

I love this beginning. I'm looking forward your update !

There is a slight problem with your first two chapters, they don't meet the minimum 700 word count for chaptered stories.  For the story itself, this is an amazing start.  You do a great job with details and other than a few missing commas and scent spelled sent, there weren't any other mistakes I noticed.  One thing I'd suggest though, I think your second chapter, chapter one, would be better placed as the prologue.  If you just switch the first two chapters, I think it would help your story flow a bit better.  But keep up the great work and I hope to see more of this story in the future :).

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This was wonderfully written. The plot was engaging and very well thought out. I couldn't find any grammar or spelling mistakes. Over all this was an excellent piece of work, I have faved it and will be looking foreward to your next update:D

This is a wornderful start! I hope you continue. This is a great plot! I can't wait for your next chapter.