Oh, I loved this, kitchen sex is awesome! haha.
It was hot and steamy, but seemed to be missing something... It lacked the fluid detailing that I prefer, especially in lemon fics. I would also recommend a beta... there were not tooo many errors, but a couple of them detracted from the story as i had to puzzle them out for a moment, thereby losing my place in the flow of the story. Keep writing and improving! Thanks for writing and I hope to see more soon...
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