Ok. I don't have a Dokuga account. Being trying to create one for years to no success. Don't take this the wrong way. Hell you probably just do this on the net for fun and could care less about folks opinions. The writing is very nice in backbone, and the premise is amazing but the characters fall short. Very short. Their motivations and reasoning and reactions are all over the place. Like Sesshomaru massacres the Inutashi in front of Kagome. And her reaction is just bland. He fails to revive them. They fall in the hands of their greatest nemesis, known for physical and psychological torture. And her reaction is bland.

She should be fighting sesshomaru tooth and nail. Trying to escape. Or if not that, emotionally withdrawing at best from the traumatic experience.

Why Is she thanking Sesshomaru for the situation involving Shippo's second death? It's his fault. This is Sesshomaru's fault. He is directly responsible for this. If he hadn't killed her friends, the fiend that is Naraku would have never found their body to play with.

Why is there like no extensive mental dialogue involving escape plans? Why is there internal dialogue about her liking Dachi? We barely see her process anything. Her grief, Sesshomaru's cruelty, her pending pregnancy, what it would mean to leave that child behind after she gives birth, would she be able to leave that child behind after she gives birth?

She doesn't process her deal with Sesshomaru, loosing her virginity to rape, potentially being stuck in the past now, etc etc. And that just what I can think of. Top of my head.

Like think of dedicating just 1 chapter just to the emotional downfall and aftermath of sesshomaru killing her friends. Her reaction to it. When she wakes, the dialogue. What she screams at him. His demands and threats. Her reaction to that. Her fear. Her fear! The bargain. Cliffhanger.

And this is just Kagome.

This Story has potential potential! If it's not rushed. And Kagome stops rolling her eyes at everything. This is not an appropriate emotion right here. At all.

This story has a dark theme and it's coming across as comical.

There are a lot of unique elements that I really like about this story but I unfortunately can't stomach the sex scenes between Kagome and Sessh. Or any of the blushing, 'I think I'm falling for her/him' 'We're going to be parents' moments. His actions of killing her entire friend group and pretty much holding her hostage/raping her were rash and unforgiveable.

He hasn't attoned properly/sincerely other then telling her 'you're not a whore...this isn't your fault', and the way kagome has seemingly glossed over all of that feels unrealistic and empty. It sours all the sweet moments they have. I can handle him 'my heir, my son etc...' because he doesn't care about anyone but himself and his goal. I can even understand why Rin being as young as she is doesn't understand what's going on and is blind to other's pain as long as her Lord is happy. But everyone throwing around the fact he lost 5 sons is incredibly disrespectful to the five friends + her freedom that Kagome has lost.

No amount of tea, stomach rubs and longing looks can take that away.

I would have loved to see Kagome truly withdraw from him mentally and emotionally with disgust/anger/guilt/sadness etc..., and him have to WORK to make serious amends, before she finally saw any good in him. Sitting in his study and watching him do mundane task shouldn't trump the image of the demon that ruined your entire existence in 2.5 seconds. 

I am curious to see how this goes as I am very drawn to the unpredictable chracter of Inuyasha's beast.

And though this may come across harshly, please know it's truly not my intention. Your writing has a certain charm to it and I enjoy your ideas a lot. I just wish, as a reader, that the love felt patient and truly earned when weighed upon the sudden depth of the crime.

Great story, it was very nice getting a more classic sesshomaru portrayal.

Me gustó mucho,pero me dio mucha pena que murieran los demas,como se aprovecho Naraku para hacer de las sullas

Please update your story please 

It was slightly ooc with how sesshomaru killed her travelling party infront of her only to make a deal with kagome. Your writing and plot execution improved rapidly after shippo dies for real. I enjoyed the last 10 chapters despite the fact that kagomes chacter development was off. I hope u continue writing . A lot of potential here.

Free my girl ???? When Kagome has been subjected consistently to such extreme stress from the very day Sesshoumaru ripped her away from her loved ones, it's a miracle that she conceived, let alone that her body hasn't aborted the fetus yet from her pain and horror. I'm still not sure if she could carry to term though, and maybe that's a good thing. Apart from Rin (the little sociopathic child who doesn't care for anyone else's grief and pain as long as her lord is happy), ain't nobody deserves a horrible scum like Sesshoumaru for a father ???? 

god sesshoumaru is such an evil fuck. mysogynistic and gross down to his core, who killed her friends and now kagome has to watch naraku puppet their remains one by one and spew hatred in front of her. it's a miracle kagome hasn't lost her mind from this torture, but maybe a part of her is holding out for the opportunity to purge these monsters. i definitely won't feel sorry if she blasts this whole shiro to dust. 

i'm rooting for her to keep the baby and get her revenge against sesshoumaru at the same time. he can find his heir in hell.

Me encanta tanto tus fics, tienes una manera única de escribir, por favor nunca te detengas, gracias 

Man, Sesshoumaru's audacity. The true monster who killed her child and replaced it with his own here isn't Naraku but him, but he has the nerve to pretend to be gracious. I really hope Kagome gets her opportunity and kills both Naraku and Sesshoumaru in the end, in one fell swoop.

I really like this story but kagome seems to have no fight in her. She just saw her friends and kit get killed and seems to be civil with sesshoumaru, she doesn't even try to attack him. Sure, she can be in denial. But she just lost shippo again. She can threaten to purify his seed before his child develops if he doesn't fix what he started.. Just feel like she's very submissive. Can't wait to read more tho! Thank you for your time in writing this for us viewers.