All I wanted was a little something to pass a few minutes of time. So I read this and instead wound up going through a rainbow of emotions in a span of three minutes.
I find your description of her emotional state incredibly deep. Either you've felt the real, soul crushing depression (not the "I'm sad for a day" bologna) that can do real damage to one's psyche, or you've known someone on a very personal level that has suffered it. That's the only way I can describe how well you wrote this first chapter.
This is a very good start! I look forward to reading what comes next.
A very promising start. I like it very much. Please continue.
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