I have really enjoyed this story so far I hope you continue.
Needs to be proofread/beta checked.
For instance, "I dough I will find…" "dough" is what you make bread & pizza from, "doubt" is the word you are looking for.
"it seemed the young women may have had lessons in the field before her memory loss" Woman, not women.
"vial hanyo" "vial" is a small flask/container that is used to hold potions, perfumes & such, "Vile" = horrible, disgusting
Mona (Chapter 1) - Sat 23 Jan 2016
Great story, looking forward to reading more soon.
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