Awesome update, can't wait to read the many chapters to come.
| Good, but you're missing quite a bit of punctuation, mainly commas after speechmarks, apostraphes for shortened words like 'wouldn't', and fullstops signalling the end of some sentences. A few spelling mistakes too like -Fortunatly which should be 'fortunately'. Other than that it's a good start.   I like it.        
 | You are off to a good start. I am liking this story already. I sometimes like sappy and fluffy S/K stories. Well done and hope to see future updates soon.        
       
 
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